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Stranger to the Apathetic Soul by ~bloatedbodies:iconbloatedbodies:



Outsider!  See me here:
I question not why you do not sleep
While I do, here comfortable in my coffin of silk
Unmoving, yes, but in soft slumber
Next to the one whom I loved
Tonight, she is constantly opened

I am not of you, outsider, nor of your kind
I hear not your tired and desperate pleas
Deaf stone is my ear to you
And to your eyes of Sorrow
I see not the glint of life, but weakness
I do not feel your hurt heart
It is foriegn, and unnerving to me
Making my spine tingle with unwilling energy
Ignorant I am of the dark time
To me, it is neither hope nor hopeless
But a glint on a foreign horizon
What is there, to hope for or have despair for?
Nothing, because like all life, yours and mine
Shall end

Now, I turn my eyes to your naively hopeful soul
I see only you, outsider
Reaching for nothing but an image
A thought
A dream
Open to mere nonentity
Listening for one who is never to make a sound
Never to see light again
Although you here, outsider, you are here for nothing
So, I now shall now put myself away from you
Never to look upon you again
For your beliefs are not shared
©2005-2010 ~bloatedbodies
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:iconamanduh78907:
this is very very good. lol.


but i do not like the very last sentence. i don't think it fits.

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Stephanie Is The Best And Hottest Person EVER!!

And She Has Nice Boobies, And A Nice Butt!!

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Great Friends.
=twitchyfeetslaur :heart: !i8wesleyscrayonz :heart: and ~MagmaDragon343 :heart:
:iconbloatedbodies:
ok *goes to edit*

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do you know who i am?
:icongoldilox8264:
Nice. It has such a nice flow to it! Many many kudos for a wonderful job! ^.^

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Loneliness doesnt require the absence of everything,
just the things you love the most, the things you need
:iconamanduh78907:
lol. awesome.

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Stephanie Is The Best And Hottest Person EVER!!

And She Has Nice Boobies, And A Nice Butt!!

---
Great Friends.
=twitchyfeetslaur :heart: !i8wesleyscrayonz :heart: and ~MagmaDragon343 :heart:
:iconbloatedbodies:
well most of it is by AnOccasionalOutburst, but i like it ;)

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do you know who i am?
:icongoldilox8264:
Oh! haha. I didn't see that part O_o Teaches me to actually read the description. Well it's a good poem nonetheless

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Loneliness doesnt require the absence of everything,
just the things you love the most, the things you need
:iconanoccasionaloutburst:
It has a lot that was missing from the original, imagery and whatnot. But I think the intended meaning of a few lines was twisted, but that's how it's supposed to be; you took it and made it your own, John. Nonetheless, I like it. Nice title, too.

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When I despair, I remember that all through history the way of Truth and Love has always won. There have been tyrants and murderers and for a time they seem invincible but in the end they always fall - think of it, always.
:iconbloatedbodies:
thank you, but it WAS based on your writing, so Kudos

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do you know who i am?

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